My 2nd prize poem!

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Strubes

Beatings No More

Hands trembling,
Eyes wide open.
Is this the end,
For which I've been hoping?
The crack of dawn,
And forever too late.
I'm still in disbelief,
That I sealed this man's fate.
I told him to stop,
He knew that I meant it.
All the years that he's hurt me,
Yet this that I've done, nothing can repent it.
This was the last time,
I couldn't take it anymore.
I've been pushed over the edge,
Now he's lying on the floor.
I stooped down to his level,
But I'm one up on him.
I've let the tensions erupt,
I've committed a ruthless sin.

Keith Todd Struble



Any thoughts on this would be very much appreciated. If you ever get bored, I have a few more that I entered (but couldn't be in the race for the money cause you can only submit once per 6 months :-\)

Just go to www.poetry.com and type in my first and last name. :)

Thanks and I appreciate it very much :D
 
Thats pretty good. I tried writing a few pieces, but nothing came out as good as that.
 
hi everyone! i am completely new to this site....is this a forum where you can upload some of your artwork or creatives? How's everyone doing?! :D
 
gamenerd said:
hi everyone!  i am completely new to this site....is this a forum where you can upload some of your artwork or creatives?   How's everyone doing?! :D
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this is just a creative small section of the website :)  just to give "more to do."  As long as the artwork follows the rules... your free to go at it.

welcome to the boards! We hope you enjoy your stay... and we hope to see you around.

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guitarwizard said:
What is that poem about Strubes?Abuse?
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Yes, it's about child abuse. The teen is finally sick of it and kills his father. Not a real happy type of poem, but it's an issue that's plaguing too many families.
 
I like it.........it good that he can express hoe he feels so freely.............if more kids were like that there would probably be no absue issue.............in my opinion
 
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