My Own Short Story

Superman

The Wheel is Turning, But the Hamster is Dead
Ok, so I wrote this for my english class about 2 years. Please note that I had to cut about 6 pages 'cuz I lost the file twice and had to retype it overnight for class. Also, because I had to shorten it so much, elements of the story have been changed and are a bit dry. Maybe sometime I'll get around to completing it. Let me know what you think of the bare-bones version.

Warriors of revenge

A shape ran through the woods, as quiet as a deer. Running by tree after tree, never slowing but always watching. He suddenly stopped in a dimly lit clearing. Artem Tu’shung'khal stood nervously and shifted his bow between hands. He knew he needed to work quickly. Scanning the clearing with brandished golden eyes, he chose a nearby tree. Artem smiled to himself with the thought of all the times he spent climbing trees without limbs as a child in the village. The thought was immediately erased; this was no time for thoughts of times past. He was far from home now, or what was left of it.

After climbing more than twenty spans up the tree, he began pulling himself up into the thick branches. He could only hope that the scarce foliage would keep him hidden long enough. Positioning himself in the crotch of a sturdy limb thicker than his own body, he began shifting his equipment – a short bow, loaded quiver, short sword, and small traveling pack. Shifting his equipment was done meticulously so as to make minimal noise while creating a larger range of motion. Finally satisfied, he sat and as left with his thoughts. He knew he had done this a hundred times before, but a voice in the back of his mind whispered of failure. Pessimism could hinder him, so he tried to think of other things, but the only thought that came to mind was that of failure. His thoughts wrestled in his mind for some time until he came up with his own argument. He had done this before; it’s the same as hunting. This time was just different game. As he wrestled in his mind, he mechanically pulled a freshly fletched arrow from his quiver and nocked it on his bow, resting it on his knee preparing to wait.

How much time passed, he couldn’t be sure, but a faint rustle of leaves was heard. Before Artem could consciously think, the partridge feathers were at his cheek and he was aiming at the sound. He nearly laughed to himself as he found a squirrel running along the ground. He briefly thought of shooting the plump rodent, perhaps the only food he would see all day, but quickly decided against it. An arrow in the ground would alert any enemies who saw it. Climbing down to retrieve the arrow and squirrel would cost precious time and risk the possibility to be seen. Artem could not afford that. It may be like hunting animals, but this was not one to underestimate. Besides, the squirrel hadn’t noticed him; perhaps any experienced woodsmen would take it as a sign of safety. With his argument settled, he cleared all thoughts out of his mind.

It was late afternoon and Artem may as well have been sleeping with his eyes open. Yet at the sound of a twig snapping over a hundred paces away, he could shoot to kill. That is, if he knew what creature he was shooting at. All it took was time and patience. However, time had become the enemy. Just be patience once more, than I can have my revenge. Just then, he heard footsteps, rhythmic and controlled. Silence was obviously not a high priority. Artem snapped to attention, fletching already to his cheek.

Off in the distance, he caught glimpses of reflected light. He knew he could shoot a squirrel at a nearly thirty paces, and he had proved himself in the village by shooting targets at eighty paces. Still, for a moment he doubted his skill. Shooting squirrels and targets was nothing compared to firing at armed and trained men. With a well-developed discipline, he pushed panic out of his thoughts as he readied himself. He figured he could fire two, possibly three arrows before he was spotted. Two or three would have done nicely, but he knew he needed at least four.

Seconds passed that stretched into eternity. Artem realized he had stopped breathing. He was as rigid and still as the tree he sat in as the first line of soldiers came into the clearing. Men marched, two abreast, with polished helmets and breastplates and wore swords at their sides. Watching them pass by, he figured he would need to wait for about a dozen men to pass before he would find his target.

Humans, he thought bitterly, I should try to kill them all. But he knew that their “services” were required. Finally he spotted his targets. Not much different from the rest of the men, but one wore a blue stripe down the bridge of his helmet. Next to him was another with a similar mark, only with a red stripe instead. Behind these two were two more men equipped with golden armor, a sign of valor and triumph – at least to humans. Artem needed to wait only a few more seconds; needed them to take just a few more steps. It will all be over soon.



In a tower over 500 leagues away, two men talked in a luxurious study. One man sat in a finely carved chair with velvet cushions filled with down feathers that were tacked to the seat. He was dressed more elaborately than a commoner would have been on a feast day. With a soft indigo hue on his coat and golden chains adding a sign of wealth. He sat with a goblet of lightly spiced wine, looking over a map on the table in front of him. The other man stood and propped his hand on the nearest bookshelf with his head down. He was dressed in the equivalent of rags to a nobleman, yet it was still finer than anything a peasant owned.

“It won’t work,” the first man said as he set his goblet down. There were pawn pieces on a map to represent soldier placements. “Our forces will be too spread out.” He spoke very matter-of-factly. He cared little about the lives of these men, but that was still more than the other man cared.

“Then what do you propose we do?” He said bitterly. He pushed himself off the bookshelf to stand fully, and looked down at the map. Both men could easily see the strategy. If the armies took two key cities, the armies would form a rough circle. From there, battles would spiral inward from village or city to the next. There would be little resistance until they reached the center where the strongest city lay – Tenshae. A city of perhaps a few thousand people barricaded against the “undefeatable” armies of the King. But Tenshae still stood independently, as it has for the past two decades. It was once a city under the King’s rule, but war had upset the entire nation. Tenshae broke free of the King, and promised to be a safe haven for anyone who wanted to be free. Consequently, the city has become a giant playground for refugees, barbarians, and even shadier characters. Taking the city back will bring these people to justice.

“Warolmer, your name may promise great victory in war, but this plot is too obvious. No doubt by the time we reach here,” he placed a finger on a village too small to be named on the map, “Tenshae will call all the remaining villages inside its walls and prepare to fight. Just in this area alone,” he made a circle with his finger, roughly halfway between the troops and the center, “there must be enough men to outmatch our current placements.” Apparently, the thugs of Tenshae had corrupted the villages surrounding it, and now they will fight along side them if they called for it.

He knew Warolmer did not care. He sat less than five paces away from the throne in the Great Hall. If he could take over Tenshae, he was sure he would be raised to advisor, or maybe even the head of generals. There, he could plan the King’s demise. The King was a confusing fellow. He would put on a show for the people by making a public appearance and talking to the people. Of course, behind closed doors he made plans to start riots and such. Then he would come in with his soldiers to settle the matter, letting the people believe he was the kind and just ruler they thought he was. Warolmer knew he was a coward at heart; he was too soft for Warolmer’s liking. But for now, as he had been for eleven years, he must be patient.

“If we place troops here,” he moved pawns with a stretched hand; “we could try to-“

“Warolmer,” the man said quietly holding up a hand. “Let it rest for half a year. By then we can have reinforcements in there. By then, you should have enough power to crush Tenshae.” He spoke firmly in a flat voice, but kept staring at the map as if thinking of other things. Warolmer thought briefly of it then let his hand drop.

“Oh, very well. Half a year. I suppose I will have to keep myself occupied with local affairs.” He more spat rather than spoke with a look of disgust on his face. Local affairs meant dealing with peasants, collecting taxes and the sort. “In any case, I’ll be off to my chamber for the night.” He walked wearily to the door as if he hadn’t slept in days. As he touched the handle, he spoke quietly over his shoulder, “And remember, keep your bloody tongue in your skull. Perhaps someday I’ll have further use for you.” With that, he opened the door and left.

The other man sat and listened for the door to close. He let a quick curse out of his mouth and cleared the pawns off the map. He then rolled it up and stored it back on the shelf it came from. A she sat back down, he picked up his goblet and took a long drink, finishing what was left in it. Licking his lips, he picked up a pawn from the table with his free hand and studied the small piece of wood. “Jhordy, ol’ boy, what have you gotten yourself into?”



The sun rose over the horizon, but Artem was still awake. He kept recalling the attack he made the previous afternoon.

He let the fletching go from his cheek. He could see it plunge into the neck of one of the gold-plated men. He died before even letting out a yelp, but Artem had already drawn another arrow and let it fly. The first man’s counterpart fell before he even noticed the other’s death. However, the other men realized what was going on. They went on the defensive, scanning the area for their attacker. Most had already drawn swords, those who hadn’t were reaching for their bows. Artem vaguely heard people shouting, but he did see men pointing in his direction. He realized that he would need to neutralize the archers, but as to how he had no idea. He let the shaft of a third arrow find a new home in the third man’s neck, but as for the fourth he would have to fight him face to face.

The man with red was who was left. Artem placed his bow in the tree to keep it safe, then pulled his sword and jumped to the ground. A small jump for him, he fell about thirty paces to the ground and rolled to his feet. Surveyig the area from the ground, he noticed that most of the men fell back, a handful guarded the fourth man, and now one was heading at him. A quick thrust felled the man with a hole in his lower leg. Another man ran at him with a giant two-handed broad sword. Artem ducked under a heavy swing that would have taken his head off. Rising up, he meant to make an upward cut, but his opponent made a skillful block with his own blade and pushed back. Trying to keep his footing, Artem waited for his attacker to strike first. As he expected, the man made a strong thrust at him. All muscle, no brain.

Artem parried the thrust and slashed at his back with less than considerable force. He fell bleeding, but he would live. Everything was working out for Artem at the moment, but as he looked up, he noticed that his fourth original target was forcing his way through the defenders while unsheathing a gold-hilted sword. Apparently, the men knew this came down between their leader and the attacker, for there was a ring of men creating somewhat of an arena. Perhaps it was meant to frighten Artem, but he felt confident in the situation.

His opponent was rather lanky like an inexperienced cadet, but his hard face spoke of many expeditions and rough travelling. The man came at him swiftly and light-footed, effortlessly moving from stance to stance. Artem could barely keep up with the repetitive swings to the side and overhead, and was caught off guard when he would switch stances seemingly without moving. Finally, after what seemed like a lifetime, he caught on to a pattern that the man kept repeating. At the first opportunity, he swung hard to counter a side attack, which knocked his opponent’s blade away from him, and then he swung upward at an angle and made a slash over the chest. With a final blow, he swung straight across cutting the man’s head off.

Artem bent over to wipe his blade on the man’s cloak then sheathed it. He looked around at the men, who didn’t seem eager to attack him anymore. Although a few stared in awe, most seemed to not even care. After perhaps a minute, a gruff voice yelled something nearly incomprehensible. The men moved away and formed lines in accordance to rank. One man stood in front of the body of men and removed his helmet.

“I am Quinn Al’tura of the house of Panthred. I am the leader of the Silver Steels, a band of rogue mercenaries.” He motioned a hand at the men behind him. There must have been about forty men, by Artem’s guess. He relaxed a bit, but was still ready to pull out his sword.

“I know who you are. Who I am is of no importance. Now, unless you want more bloodshed,” he motioned to the decapitated body next to him, “you will listen and give me your services.” He gave a square level look at Quinn, who seemed to be balancing weights in his mind. One of the men near the back spoke up.

“We do not serve elves!” Other men began to rally with him.

“Silence!” Quinn barked at the men. “I will hear what you have to say, in private.” Quinn handed his helmet to a man behind him as well as his sword. After doing so, he looked at Artem expectantly. He sighed and dropped his own sword, then to earn a bit of trust, he dropped one of his many hidden knives. Quinn looked at him curiously then dropped his belt knife. This confirmed Artem’s caution and he knew that the man carried at least two more knives. The man was trying to beat him at his own game, but this was only the beginning. The two started walking away from the rest of the men, always eyeing each other cautiously.

At a spot well away from sight of camp, the two talked for close to an hour. Artem explained his situation. He came from the elven nation of Dorivtale, translated as Dawn of the River. There, men mercilessly destroyed his village. Artem tried to hold back his distaste for men, as well as his utter disgust of trying to hire them to fight with him. But whatever he tried to hold back, Quinn questioned; making holes in his story seem to explode. The more Artem tried to cover up, the more skewed his story became. Finally, Quinn seemed to have enough.

“As far as I’m concerned, our previous employer’s are dead. Count yourself lucky that we were already paid. Along with our dead employers, you wounded some of my men, which doesn’t sit too well with them or me. And now, you want to have our “services”? All of this to get revenge on one man?” He spoke sarcastically like he was scolding a child for a poor prank. Artem stood there until he was done talking then looked at the man closely.

“Do you have family?” He asked slowly. Quinn looked back at him with a bit of shock. He seemed to scrap his brain for an idea of what to say. Finally, he sighed and talked slowly.

“Yes, I do. I mean, I did. My father died in battle when I was a boy. My mother died in a barbarian raid less than a year later. After I got over it, I married a nice woman. Of course, she and my two children died of illness while I was away.” There was pain in his eyes, but he quickly covered it up with a hard face. “Very well, we will…accompany you. Or rather, you will accompany us. I will tell the men something to satisfy their curiosity and not have them kill you. From here, we will go to the city of Barchune. There we will temporarily disband and look for leads on possible employers. However, you and I will look for leads on who gave the orders to destroy your village.” He looked at Artem sternly, but he knew that he wasn’t doing this for standard work. There was something more to his story, but he wouldn’t press it.

“We’ll leave in the hour,” Artem stated as he started to walk back.

“You don’t give the orders,” Quinn replied heatedly. “We will bury these men, have a meal, and rest for the night. Tomorrow we will march.”

“Fine, I will be leaving in the hour. I will be traveling ahead anyway. I mean no offense, but your armor doesn’t make you an effective scout.” Quinn looked puzzled and sat to ponder this for a moment as the elf continued to walk away. Artem just hoped his diplomatic skills had been enough.

He never left, but rather found a perch on a tree to keep an eye on the camp. Quinn disappointed him, even though the man kept to his word. They all took time to bury the four men who died, say something about them or for them, and erect symbols in their honor. Artem could remember seeing a similar ritual after the fight at his village. A shame there was no one to bury the rest of the fools. After the ritual, Quinn and his men began to set up camp, and Artem began scolding him in his mind. By the time the men had fires built and meals ready for cooking, he made himself comfortable in the tree for the night.

He entertained himself with a game he learned from his father as a child. He pulled some bark away from the tree, careful to select the loosest he could find. It was actually a game that couldn’t be won. The object was to pick two pieces of bark and try to fit them together. He remembered the words of his father when he was teaching the game; You may as well melt rocks with your hands. But Artem had taken a new approach. He examined the bark closely, looking at the patterns on the edges. He then tries to tear bits away from the other pieces of piece of bark. Of course, he still hasn’t gotten the pieces to fit. It was once said, even before his father’s time, that if you could fit them together, you will have the blessings of the woods. To Artem, it was nothing more than a way to pass the time.

Now, as the sun rose, Artem simply sat and pondered his next move. He had forty armed men to gain the trust of before he controlled them. Even then, it would be difficult to strike an army of no less than five thousand. “It will have to do,” he told himself.



I will try to post more later.
 
Quinn was the first to rouse. Artem watched intently as Quinn carefully checked his equipment; the same way a storeowner analyzes every piece of merchandise to maximize profit. Quinn seemed to have a look of disgust as he went about. After checking every scrap of iron, leather, and cloth twice over, he went about waking his men. His method and manner was quite crude. He lifted a breastplate and beat on it mercilessly with a sturdy stick. That kind of racket could compare to that of a town bell, but Artem’s real amazement came when only a few men roused. His judgment of these men was beginning to slip. How can anyone trust such ill-disciplined men?

Several minutes later, after those who had been asleep were kicked awake, the camp was a bustle of ineffective activity. Men ran around randomly, some sat and joked with each other, and only a select few were checking over their equipment. It felt like it was midday before the men ate and packed up camp. Artem knew he could nothing more than sit and watch while aggravated. He was waiting for a time when he could slip by the men to have a harsh word with Quinn. His opportunity came when Quinn got up and walked away from camp. Artem intercepted him in the same area they held the last meeting.

“I’ve been waiting for you,” he spoke slowly and had a way of holding himself that spoke of little sleep.

“We need to get moving. I said within the hour last night, yet here we are still. Do you plan on living here?” Quinn did not seem insulted. Artem assumed he was a good diplomat after years of dealing with rough employers. The man remained calm and spoke simply.

“Peace. There is no need for harsh words. If what you say is true, then I suspect that this man you’re after will not be going anywhere soon.” He didn’t seem too interested in what he was saying, and rather had his mind on other matters.

“And every day he will gain more power. If he is not eliminated, more will suffer.” It went without saying, he meant more of the elven nation will suffer, although it was true that some human cities will burn.
“Very well,” he said with a low sigh and drooping shoulders. “Within the hour of now. Then we will be on our way to Barchune.” Artem was walking away before he finished. He was beginning no tot trust this man, but it was all he had for now. He would need to find a way to tie this man to every word. But that would be for another time. Right now, he needed to ready his own equipment.

As Quinn had said, the men were moving in the hour. Artem had said to Quinn he would scout ahead, but he really circled around to keep an eye on the men. In these woods, he did not think it was necessary to keep a watchful eye for anyone or anything except these men. He briefly wondered what Quinn had told these men, but he felt it was best to stay out of sight until nightfall. The men themselves kept eyeing the woods curiously and nervously as if they expected something to jump from the trees.

As nightfall came, Artem began to worry if these men would stop and make camp again. Quinn called a halt and his commands confirmed his fear. He watched as Quinn slipped away from camp. You better have a good reason for this nuisance, he thought to himself as he began to follow.

He found Quinn along the trail out of sight of the camp and made no attempt to sneak up on him. Before the soldier could say anything, he nearly started yelling at him. “What is the meaning of this? I understand humans cannot fare well in the dark, but why do you have to set up an entire camp for one night?” Quinn did not look surprised or hurt. He simply stood and listened to the elf. “If your men could rest on the ground with a small fire, we could be marching by sunrise tomorrow.”

Quinn waited a moment to make sure Artem was done. As he opened his mouth to start an explanation, the two heard cries coming from camp. Of course, the two had made a minor mistake by backtracking from camp. This was a brief thought as both unsheathed their swords simultaneously and started to run back. Artem could see farther and run faster, so he ended up leaving Quinn behind him.

Approaching the camp, he noted that no fires had been lit yet. The clashing of steel rang clearly through the crisp night air. Within two hundred paces of the small clearing meant for camp, Artem could clearly make out the figures fighting. They were obviously bandits, dressed in layers of rags and with multiple piercings all over their bodies. He noted the oddly shaped swords they fought with, but put it out of his mind. As he continued running, he heard a twig snap less than ten paces away from him.

Without thinking, Artem ducked and rolled heavy horizontal swing. Rising on his opponent’s left side, he meant to slice into the man’s back with a quick swing. To his surprise, the man was quick enough to put his blade between Artem’s and his body. Sliding the length of his blade along the broadside of his opponent’s, he backed off. The man turned to face him, and Artem nearly doubted he was a man. He could clearly see more than a dozen scars on his face, but all thought was cut off as the man lunged at him. To Artem, it should have been a simple sidestep and parry, followed by a swift stroke to the back. However, he found it difficult to knock the blade away and tripped over himself moving out of the way. As he braced himself for an attack while he was down, he heard the man yell in frustration. Or pain? Artem looked over and saw the dead man on the ground and Quinn wiping his blade.

“You fight well, for an elf.” There was some sort of sincerity in his eyes, but the tone of his voice suggested mockery. “Hurry, we have to help the rest.” Artem would have to redeem his dignity later, but for now he knew Quinn was right. Before the two could start for the camp, they came to a startling realization – it was quiet. There was no ringing of steel, no cries of war or death; there was absolutely no sound at all. Artem looked at Quinn, who returned the same puzzled stare.
 
“Can the fight be over?” Artem asked in a hushed voice. He strained his ears to hear anything.

“Possibly, but we won’t know until we check.” Quinn was running before he finished.

“No!” Artem quietly shouted after Quinn, but he was already too far away to hear. We should go quietly to check on it, not charge in. With a deep breathe in frustration, he sheathed his sword and started for the camp along the trail.

As he came into the area, Artem was rather relieved at what he saw. Quinn’s men were setting up camp like nothing happened. There was a pile of bodies near the tree line. They had obviously been looted of everything possibly of value. All the rings were taken, along with weapons, packs, and for some even clothes. Artem’s only thought was that h e hoped there wouldn’t be a burial for each of those men.

He began looking over the camp and spotted Quinn. It was a second relief to see the most injured were suffering from a minor cuts and bruises. As he watched Quinn helping to set up a tent, he figured it would be a bad time to walk in. I’ll compliment his men later. Tonight, we will rest.



Closing the book with a sigh of relief, Warolmer placed the pen back into the vial of ink. I hate taxes. I hate them almost as much as dealing with peasants. The books had been cross-referenced with the treasury. As usual, a few gold crowns were missing. He suspected some family always came short on payment, but a few crowns meant nothing to Warolmer. As he had done a dozen times before, he replaced the missing portion from his own pocket to make the books and treasury balance out. Not like anyone’s going to check, but I can’t afford any mistakes now.


With his work done, he casually looked around the room. There was nothing extraordinary about it. However, in its simplicity was finesse. A fireplace along one wall, which contained a bright fire, was made of strange stones stacked and somehow secured in place. Warolmer never had an interest for how things were built. On top of the fireplace were half a dozen candles which, placed in front of shining mirror-like tiles, helped brighten the room. Furniture was simple. All that was in the room was the chair he sat in, the desk he worked on, and a bookshelf on the wall opposite the fireplace. The shelf had residential maps, a few maps of neighboring cities, and tax books. As Warolmer’s eyes fell on the bookcase, a sudden spark of anger flared inside of him. Ignoring it, he placed the book from his desk in the shelf. Sitting down again, he put a cork in the vial and was about to put away the quill pen when words of his father came to mind. “A feather will float a mile with a breeze, but without a helping hand it will go nowhere.” No, that’s not how it goes, is it? Twelve years since my father died. Has it been twelve years? It’s been too long. I must work quickly now. It may have been twelve years, but I will have my revenge.

With this thought in mind, Warolmer decided to pay a visit to Jhorison. He suspected the man should still be up dealing with other affairs, most likely trade. “Jhordy” as he liked to call himself, was an excellent trader. He always knew how to maximize profits and occasionally swindled the “trading pirates”. These so-called pirates were experienced traders who traded between continents. They always overpriced exotic goods and sold them to unaware people. That isn’t important right now. Although I will need him for years to come, I need to focus on the present.

Warolmer walked down the hall at a brisk pace, hardly noticing servants bowing and backing away as he passed. Turning down twisting hallways and walking through strange arches, he finally came to the door he was looking for. He thought of knocking, but instead pushed the door open and walked in. Jhordy jerked up from his seat, obviously irritated by the intrusion. However, Warolmer was never good at reading facial expressions.

“Relax, I’m not here to kill you.” He spoke in a friendly tone, or as much of one as he could muster.

“Right,” Jhordy said slowly. He started to move from behind his desk to come and formally greet his visitor. Warolmer noticed the books on his desk, and had to smile at the predictability. Just as he suspected, he was busy with trade. “To what do I owe the honor of-“

“Cut the formalities,” Warolmer broke in with a swipe of his hand. “I agreed to six months. Now I want them in three months.” He realized his tone was colder than it should have been. Jhordy took a step back, blinking furiously while studying the man.
 
“Are you ill?” he finally asked in a low voice.

“I’m not mad,” he replied heatedly. “I want the orders for infantry out by next week. The men will need to march long and hard to get to their positions. I know you can do it.”

“Next week? You must be mad. You know that even if I worked all day on it for the next week, I would only get the papers to start filling out.” Jhordy kept staring wide-eyed as he talked.

“Forget the papers. I know you can do it.” He walked to the bookshelf and put a hand on the maps. “Three months. We don’t have much time left.” Jhordy had finally lost his wide-eyed expression and had composed himself.

“You have as long as it takes. How can it be you’re running out of time?”

“Just do it. I know you can. Just make it happen.” Warolmer was leaning on the shelf with his head down. Jhordy looked at him and seemed to be weighing the options in his head.

“I can’t make any promises, but-“

“I said just do it!” Warolmer leaped at Jhordy and pinned him down to the floor, holding him by the neck. The man showed no fear, nor any other emotion. He let go just enough for him to speak in a rasped voice.

“I’ll do what I can.”

“See that you do.” He let go and stood up. “My apologies for interrupting you. Good night to you, sir.” He quickly left the room leaving Jhordy on the floor rubbing his neck.

Walking down the hall, thoughts were flying through his head. Even three months is too long. I need to work faster. He kept mumbling to himself as he kept a steady pace. He never thought any servants would overhear him, but they would never say anything if they did. Patience, you have to be patient. But I’ve been patient for eleven years. If I can coordinate everyone, I can finally stop being patient.



Quinn was the first to rouse, as usual. He followed through his morning routine he has performed for years. First, he checked all the clothes he wore for rips and tears. Then, he moved on to his equipment, checking every piece twice over to make sure nothing was broken or tampered with. Satisfied with his gear, he started to equip his breastplate, helmet, gauntlets, and sword. After last night, no one kept a sword out of arm’s reach.

Having finished with his own equipment, he decided to take a look at the wounded. There were plenty of scratches and minor, perhaps a bruise or two. Of course, those weren’t bad enough to be considered wounded. The worse injuries were deep gashes that led to serious bleeding and such. The most serious injury was a fellow whose left arm had been sliced nearly to the bone from shoulder to elbow. According to the other men, he handled it very well. There was some disagreement about details, but the idea was the same.

As his arm was sliced open, he dropped his sword. Poor fellow, it was his sword arm. He rolled to his right and managed to keep evading the deadly steel blade. Finally he came back around to his sword on the ground. He stooped as if to pick it up and the man thrust his blade. Of course, the poor man couldn’t wield a weapon in his right hand. Instead of picking up his sword, he kicked the broad side of the man’s sword with the toe of his boot. With the sword out of the way, he swiftly kicked the man in his ribs. As he fell to his knees, Quinn’s man gave him a solid kick to the head. Even though it twisted the man’s neck around, he picked up his sword and drove in into his back like a stake. Brave lad. Foolish, but brave.

The only tent that was set up in camp was for the wounded. As Quinn pulled the flap back, he saw his man already awake. There was pain in his eyes as he stared at the makeshift sling and bandages for his arm.

“Good to see you still alive,” Quinn tried to smile. He would probably have to disband him permanently with an injury like that.

“Just a scratch, sir,” he replied weakly. The rings under his eyes told Quinn that he had gotten little sleep, if any. But what is his name? I don’t remember seeing him before. The man stared blankly while his commander got lost in thought. The silence lasted a moment until he spoke up, “How is Jahard?” Quinn snapped back and slowly regarded the man. Jahard? He vaguely remembered talking to a man named Jahard the night before.

“He’s fine. He got out with a couple scratches.” The man looked at him with a vague smile and a quiet laugh. Or was it a scoff?

“He always was the better swordsman.” It made Quinn remember why he was here.

“Yes, speaking of that. I came to ask where you learned to fight like you did last night.” The young man stared at him with fond memories floating through his mind.

“ I was raised by a monk. Of course, I became an outcast for not accepting their faith.” He let out a disgusted scoff. “In any case, I’m hurt, but I’m still ready to fight.” Quinn put a hand on the man’s good shoulder.

“I’m sure you are son,” he said in a quiet nurturing tone. “But for now, you need to get some rest.” Leaving the tent, Quinn made up his mind to disband the man. Perhaps give him a crown or two, enough to eat and get anywhere he wants to go.
 
Two days marching found them in Barchune. After disbanding temporarily, Quinn and Artem roamed the town for clues on who Artem’s enemy was. Four days of searching found them at a great tower. According to locals, it was a perfect square from bottom to top, with a spine on the top. Although simple in design, the utter perfection of it left many speechless. Artem’s worry was whether or not he could get Quinn to help him in this fight. Just this one last fight, and it will be done. From the top of the hill nearly a mile away, he could easily see the tower seated on a flat plain. It would be a pity to destroy it. He then left to talk to Quinn.

After nearly an entire night of negotiating, Quinn finally agreed to help Artem on this one last fight. His men could loot the tower and receive payment out of its treasury. Or, if need be, it could be taken out of the pockets of anyone in there. There were rumors that the tower was where orders for war came from, as well as the King’s private accounting. Artem hoped it was true.

Three more days were spent scouting the area. After that, another night placing Quinn’s men. It was agreed that it would be better to try diversionary tactics over straight battle. It was also agreed that an attack at early dawn would be best. Quinn and a few men would walk out and get the attention of the tower. Artem was to sneak in while the main group was occupied.

Finally the time came. It was perhaps an hour and a half before sunrise, and Quinn went out with his men. Each carried a heavy bow and their own sword. Also, seemingly out of nowhere, they had with them a wagon, drawn by a single mule. They lined up in front of the tower clearly in the open. Apparently, there was no one in the watchtowers. Irritated, the men lit torches and pulled the flap back on the wagon while they were throwing pieces about. No, they’re not throwing them. Artem strained to see. They’re assembling something. He couldn’t help but smile to himself. Quinn had somehow gotten his hands on a catapult.

It took only a few minutes to assemble it and load it, but by then an alarm had went up. The gated on the bottom of the tower were raised to let out the tower's militia. Artem recognized his opportunity and sneaked in.

Inside the tower, he climbed endless stairs and walked through dizzying hallways. Noises began to filter in through the windows from outside. Swords clashed and he heard the whizzing of arrows flying. War cries and death cries were entangled and sounded almost like a painful song of sorrow and regret coming from the field. Artem could not waste time thinking about that. His priority was to kill this man called Warolmer. He had started opening every door he came by to find him, a description from some local people engraved in his mind. As he walked into the next room, sword at the ready, he saw Warolmer trying to pack maps and food and gold.

Warolmer immediately noticed him and pulled the sword from his hip. He quickly launched himself at Artem with a fury of slices and thrusts. Artem had underestimated the man’s ability to handle a sword. For several minutes he did all he could to keep the cold steel away from his flesh. After what seemed an eternity, the two broke apart and faced each other with their weapons poised and ready. Artem knew he had a strong endurance, but he did not know how much longer he could stand this. As he readied himself to attack, he noted a foreign reflection in the mirror behind Warolmer. Before he could understand what was happening, the man lay on his face with the hilt of a dagger sticking out of his back and blood soaking his coat.



Two months later, Artem was back home. He stared at what was left of his village, most of it still charred black. He walked through the village quietly, then chose a spot far beyond the village and began constructing a new home. Back in the tower lay his weapons, never to be used again. Artem knew he would live alone for the rest of his life, but the life of his family had been avenged.

As for Quinn, Artem could only hope that he would find work elsewhere. He and his men did survive the attack, as fortune would have it. The day earned them a reputation and now their services are in a higher demand than they used to be.

Artem tried not to think about the man. He knew he would have many years to ponder his actions, but for now a task was at hand. He needed to finish his house before the storms of summer came in.



Sorry, like I said, its a bare bones version with A LOT of details missing that I had meant to put in. Well, tell me what you think and I might finish it up sometime.

Thanks for reading. Hope you enjoyed it :)
 
Well I finally had the 4 hours of free time to read it :lol

It was actually really good. I actually wanted to keep reading more. Keep up the good work. :D
 
Thanks. I realize that it is pretty long and wasn't sure if anyone was gonna read it. Any particular parts you liked? Anything I should be aware of for later?
 
I really liked how u went into that much detail. I basically had a picture in my head of what was going on. Nice job!

I'd like a more explosive beginning in future works, but I can understand why it started off the way it did here. :)
 
Yeah, this one did start off slow, but I was hoping for something that would perk up your curiosity. And detail seems to be my speciality.

Now, do you think this one would be worth going back and rewriting to put in a lot more events? I mean, it already is like 11 pages typed, but I did cut out like another 6 or so in other events. What do you think?
 
Yeah, I think it's worth it for sure. I do some writing myself, but I've never typed them out. I'd add a couple more events. Couldn't really tell you what to add cause I haven't read all of it (cause u said u had more, correct?). From what I've read here, I'd add some unexpected twists or fast events to throw people off-guard.

Other than that, I can't think of any flaws.
 
Thanks, i appreciate it. Maybe if some other people would read it..

Anyway, i really appreciate it. I did have some twists (minor) but I was thinkiong of some to throw in. I kind alike some backstabbing stuff, and the only thing I could fit in was at the end. But that one wasn't meant that way. I had this whole plot thought out that would be going on underneath (one of those that kinda make you go "huh?" and don't make sense until the end). If I was good enough, I wanted to have several plots intertwining and splittng and going all over th eplace, yet making sense and stuff (if this statement makes any sense).

Maybe I will try to write more. But I also have like 3 or 4 other short stories I wanted to work on too.
 
Superman said:
Thanks, i appreciate it. Maybe if some other people would read it..

Anyway, i really appreciate it. I did have some twists (minor) but I was thinkiong of some to throw in. I kind alike some backstabbing stuff, and the only thing I could fit in was at the end. But that one wasn't meant that way. I had this whole plot thought out that would be going on underneath (one of those that kinda make you go "huh?" and don't make sense until the end). If I was good enough, I wanted to have several plots intertwining and splittng and going all over th eplace, yet making sense and stuff (if this statement makes any sense).

Maybe I will try to write more. But I also have like 3 or 4 other short stories I wanted to work on too.


Well If you ever need anybody to critique any of your writings, I will :)
 
I finally got around to reading it

veary nice alot of good details, especially at the begining towards the end it started to thin out a little though
 
Yeah, that had to do with my shortage of time again. I already got input from Strubes, but do you think this owuld be worth going back and rewriting again?
 
Well, if you guys enjoy it, it may be worth going back and rewriting. So, it seems that I would put some more events in there, and increase the detail near the end.

Sorry Strubes, I would read your poetry, but I am not really any good with critiquing or writing it. Still, I wouldn't mind reading it.
 
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