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Experiment
EARTH
By Shea Meadth

Prologue
The man ran as fast as his legs would take him, the cries of creatures echoing from behind him. They were catching up. It wasn’t easy to make your escape when you had to shove your way through thick brush. Even after the war had torn apart most the rainforest, the Amazon remained dangerous place.
“Dam them! How could those, freaks, ambush us like that? Sneaky bastards! I must get back to base now. AH SHIT!”
The man stumbled and tripped over into the mud. He wiped the mud from his face and stood up again. Then began to run once more. But it was too late now. A large beetle like creature emerged in front of him. It measured up in size to the man, but packed a bite that could cut through trees. All it needed to do was get him within its large pincers.
“DAM YOU!”
The man withdrew his Desert Eagle and placed a full clip into the creature, enough to finish it off permanently. Loud noises from more of these insect like creatures were coming closer. He had to escape. The base was only another mile away.
He ran for another minute, the sounds still coming closer.
“Geeze, these bastards don’t give up do they?”
The man then hit a wall.
“Ouch. That didn’t tickle. Hey, what’s this? A wall? There’s a door there. I’ll try and hide. Ha, ha, I’d like to see them get me now.”
He went through the door, and then followed the steps deep down until he finally reached the bottom. He was curious of what this place was. It looked new, but how could that be? It looked like a bunker, but it lead into a long corridor that stretched both ways. Where was he? Then he heard movement and he hid behind a pile of crates.
Peeping through the small gap, he saw two tall looking creatures wearing a yellow and gold uniform. Their faces were hidden behind large, medieval style helmets. But something about them, though they looked human, was unnatural. He decided to follow them.
After waiting a few seconds for the creatures to go through the door. He slowly entered the room, slowly opening the door so he could check that it was clear. The two creatures he had followed were heading down some stairs into an even larger room. But there was a balcony and he couldn’t see from where he was. So the man moved over to the ledge to look over. And what he saw would give him the biggest shock of his life.
Down below were heaps of mutants. Human looking ones, but they each had a different look to them. Some with extra eyes, larger arms, disfigured body parts, etc. The usually things to expect from this species. But they were different. They all wore white lab coats and worked hard on what appeared to be weapons. What was all this? Looking further on the man spotted another shock. Five rows of mutants in the same yellow and green uniform marched back and forth, a single creature in red and green uniform shouting at them.
Another shock was that they spoke English. They understood our language! How were they able to do so? There had not been any recordings that he had heard have that talked about talking mutants. And this looked like a whole new civilization, but it also looked like there was an army down here. But how big was it? This had to be reported back at base. But what if they didn’t believe him? He needed evidence, but how to get it.
The man pulled out his phone. It had an inbuilt camera. All he needed was photos of what was happening. He aimed it down at the mutants working on the devices and took three photos. Then he zoomed in more and took a photo of the marching mutants, which were now exiting through a larger door. Suddenly the two he had tailed came up the stairs.
“I hear that the attacks will be launched soon.” Said the one on the right.
“It’s supposed to be the most important operation ever… HEY! A HUMAN! Quick! Lets get him!”
The man was quick and he exited the room and headed up the stairs. But the two were keeping up and gaining on him. He un-holstered his gun and fired. Placing three powerful round into the closet one. Then finishing off the second, which had begun to fire at him with a powerful energy weapon. He quickly went over to the corpses and took the gun. Then he noticed the insignia on the side of the uniform and ripped it off.
“This should be enough proof. But what the hell are the NER?”
He emerged back into the jungle. The bugs that had chased him were gone now, so he could easily make his way back to base, to report the shocking things he had found.

Chapter 1: EUDF
John sat at the end of the long table conversing with his generals on the present state of the remainder of humanity. The three generals that sat with him in the meeting room was General F Davison, a veteran from the previous UNDF. General P Gala, who was promoted by John after his well-known attempts to rescue civilians from mutant infested areas that had no hope left. And then there was General S Sanders, a very valued soldier who was formally a respected IFE general, but after he stopped a fight between UNDF and IFE soldiers, he pledged allegiance to the EUDF, or Earth United Defense Federation.
“So what are we going to do about the infestation of Carpentaria? UNDF and IFE soldiers still fight the war there. Is there nothing we can do to stop them before they are swarmed by mutants?” Asked General Gala.
John massaged his temple and sighed. He had been working none stop for the last four days. “We are going to have to leave them. The UNDF and IFE don’t want any of our help. We’ll just have to keep a close eye on them and hope they come around to their senses so they can be pulled out before they all get killed.”
Carpentaria wasn’t the only place where UNDF and IFE kept on fighting for a war that had ended three years ago. There were those who accepted that the war was over and enjoyed the peace they finally had. But there were those who didn’t accept it, those who had no intentions on allowing the enemy to survive and ignored the end of the war. Fighting onward for a cause that no longer existed. Then there were the rebels who chose to end the fighting, but thought that the EUDF was corrupt and would only cause more trouble. If only they could realize the real truth.
After the war, John, with the confirmation of high command, took over the UNDF. Then he proceeded with signing a peace treaty with IFE officials, which was supposed to end the war. He then proclaimed the UNDF, the EUDF. But as said, there were those who did not want to accept it, and still held onto the previous war. But it was drawing to a close now.
The capital of the EUDF, Harmonia (Latin for Harmony), was the first new city to be built on Earth after the war. It spanned in size, almost equal to that of Orion, which kept a constant Orbit above the capital. The capital is also the only location where there are shuttle launch pads to get to Orion.
General Sanders stood up. Not happy with John’s decision. “We can’t just leave them there. Sure there are other war zones that we haven’t been able to help. But this is different. They are going to be overrun with mutants in the next three days. And it’s not only soldiers there. There are civilians too. Are you just going to let them die?”
“Don’t you think I know that already?!” John was angry and glared at the General. “I am doing everything I can to stop them from fighting. But they will not listen, they are too determined to wipe each other out!”
“There has to be a way to save them.”
John breathed in deep, adjusted his seat, and then exhaled. His voice was calmer now. “Keep rescue craft as close to them as you can without being shot at or being caught in the mutants path. When they need help, they’ll have no choice but to do what we want.”
General Gala cleared his throat and then spoke. “Can’t we at least try and stop the mutants before they reach them?”
“We cannot. Our forces are overextended all ready and are having to deal with mutants, rebels, UNDF and IFE soldiers. We don’t have enough to hold off that species.”
The species of mutants that charged towards Carpentaria were an elephant like species. Their tough armored hides could withstand a 50 caliber round. And their height and weight made them capable of trampling an entire legion. They tended to swarm from place to place. Stopping to breed and gather food.
In the world today, the mutants are broken into categories. The largest population being the insectoid, which are made through mutated insects, and even spiders. But spiders are separately classified as Arachnids still. But they remain in the same category.
The most dangerous are the Carnivorous Mutants. Obviously because they feed only on meat, but mostly because they developed high speed for their main advantage, following through with claws to bring down prey.
There are the herbivore species, which are an evolution of what ever feeds on plants. And some even prove to make decent pets.
The humanoid, which are evolution from human DNA. They are generally one of the smartest, but not the most deadly. Some humanoids live in tribes. They are left alone and only attacked when they pose a threat. There had been only one case of this happening where a band of humanoids attacked and took over a village. They then stole and used anything they could find there. Even weapons. They were inevitably dealt with by a roving band of rebels.
There are no recordings of actually species of mutant fish, birds, or reptiles. Though there have been sightings that appear to be one of these. But there have not been enough to make any new classification
Finally there are the tree main categories. The Infectious. Which can infect others with the mutagine, Chemical-M, just by coming in small contact. The semi-contagious, which can only infect through direct contact, like a bite. Luckily, there is few of either of these left. Then there is the Stable. Which cannot infect anything. They are fully completed mutants. And are how a new species comes to be since by this stage they can generally re-produce.
“I think we should close this discussion for now. It’s been a long day and I need some time alone to think.”
“But sir,” Began general Sanders.
“The discussion is closed. There will be another meeting tomorrow at 1100 hours.”
The Generals saluted and John returned it. Then they leaved.
John continued to sit in his chair, massaging his temples. He reached over for his mug and sipped at the cold coffee. Running the EUDF was getting harder each day. Back when it just began, three years ago, things ran so much more smoothly. But now things were getting out of hand. He stood up and prepared to leave when a man burst through the door carrying a folder and a large case. He awkwardly saluted.
“Sir, we just received this…” He panted for a while, “This intel from Scandid HQ.”
John took the folder, slightly puzzled. He read through the pages, his expression increasing in shock as he looked through more pages.
“This can’t be true! Where did this all come from?”
“There more sir… Photos at the back.”
John flipped through to the back and took at the photos. He then dropped the folder, looking through the photos in shock.
“There’s more…”
The soldier opened up the case and took out what was inside to show John.
“What is this?”
“It is a weapon, sir.”
“I know that. I was speaking out of shock and amazement.”
“Sorry sir.”
John held the weapon in his hand. It was small and resembled the shape of a Desert Eagle and a Revolver combined. Inside was a small blue object. John examined it more closely.
“Its an energy weapon. But it’s so more advanced than our V5-Energy Pistol’s. Where did you say it came from?”
“Scandid HQ.”
“Scandid? Our stronghold in the Amazon. What the hell is something like this doing there? And what are those in the photos?”
John placed down the weapon and paced back and forth.
“I want whoever discovered this to be here right now. Well, don’t just stand there, get moving. I want to see who found this now!”
The soldier stumbled out of the room leaving John alone to think. Something bad was going on. This didn’t look like anything he’d seen before. And though the images were hard to make out, the things in them were not human. Something was happening, and it wasn’t good.

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